Have the requirements been met from the brief?
In the brief that has been given to us by the British Film Institute it firstly states the lack of diversity in exposure of other locations around England, excluding London, therefore my film satisfies the requirements, I aim to represent the town of Tarring. Secondly, it states the film should be produced with a little to no budget, this is addressed by my film as my production and pre-production total costs will come to little. Furthermore, the film needs to be set in a noteworthy landmark feature, this is satisfied as my filming is in the Tarring Church. Overall, all aspects that they have portrayed and asked as a requirement, I have met.
Relevant changes
I need to ensure that the description of scenes need to be only what you can see and hear, during the first draft by descriptive analysis is prodominately telling a story, although this is showing the audience what happens it doesn’s connote the vision that the actors will see. This is known as internal motivation, this is not what is meant to be in script descriptions as it doesn’t describe what is in and heard but internal thoughts of actors, I will ensure I change this to therefore allow my cast and production to understand what needs to be portrayed when filming.
In this screen grab it shows a slugline at top, as portrayed correctly with the use of camera shots on top of the location, the slugline is indentifying that the camera shots needs to pan left/right, this is where the camera man will move the camera left and right corresponding to the movement of the protagonists and main focus points of the scene. Secondly, the location is shown in EXT this means exterior, informing us that the scene is outside, Further information is given with the “church pathway” this reinforces the notion of the location. However, as explained above my description is wrong, as demonstrated in the screen grab below I have removed the internal motivation, making it factual so now casts can interpret the intentions of a scene.
An example of how I removed the internal motivation is where I now said, James’ eyes enlarge, this is corresponding to my first draft as previously I described the thoughts but now I’m describing the physical things that can be seen.
Is the content correct?
Now, after doing 3 drafts of my script I have removed all internal motivation. Also my structure is right for making scripts, with the slug line parried above the description, this allows the scene to be told, location, camera shot, time of day. Furthermore, it isn’t indented, this is the correct location of it; likewise the description is not indented however by character names are centralised and capitalised. The speech lines are indented once, to give clarity to the script to ensure little confusion occurs between what is being described and what is being spoken.
Script errors/review
Overall, before I made my final draft I had to ensure my description was punctual, now after addressing that my script as the bright format and description meaning that I have no improvements to make upon it.
Feedback
During script read throughs the feedback I recieved was I need to institute camera shots that will be used, this will allow a great understadning on what the protagonist will experience. Furthermore, making it vastly easier for cast production, people like the cameramen to then have a clear understanding on what is required of them in set. This has many positives of it, firstly it makes production of the film more fluent as everyone will understand what to do, and secondly it will eliminate confusion.
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